So for the three of you have been wondering, the house is pretty much fixed (hurray for good water), and the rewrite has been finished and emailed to the interested party.
I don’t think he’s too interested, because he seems to be leaning toward doing a short rather than a feature, but the whole situation gave me good motivation to finish the draft, so I’m not complaining at all.
This draft was the second, and it was significant. I’ve never done a second pass at a script before. (I tend to lose faith in my own work before I even get there.) So this was my first encounter with the phenomenon that I shall henceforth refer to as “Pulling at the Sweater Thread.”
That is, every time you make a seemingly small change, it will force you to change five other things you hadn’t previously realized would be impacted.
For example, I decided that one of the characters should be met several pages earlier than she was in the original draft. Hours later, I found that I had been forced to write a completely new scene with that character and the hero, as well as moving several of the hero’s other scenes around into a completely different order. I then had to change a bunch of scene transitions that now didn’t make any sense, and finally drag in a much later scene that seemed to want to go there.
Needless to say, my script is quite different now. Same movie. Even, same basic plot. But better: more concise, more structured, and with better character development.
Of course, the outline is now so different that when I tried to pitch it to someone yesterday, I couldn’t even remember where all the beats went. Thank goodness it was only Greg, and not someone who is actually part of the development process (as if I would know someone like that, anyway).
I give myself the rest of the week off, and then it’s draft-three time. Already making mental notes for it, because I can’t help myself.